Better Editing. Sling some red ink on the copy.
For instance "
With the holidays right around the corner we are all looking forward to locking up our businesses and getting all comfy and cozy at home. However if you are like I am you cannot get 100% relaxed because you are still trying to figure out if you took care of everything back at the office [...]
With the holidays right around the corner we are all looking forward to locking up our businesses and getting all comfy and cozy at home. However if you are like I am you cannot get 100% relaxed because you are still trying to figure out if you took care of everything back at the office before you headed out to celebrate with your family.
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You have the same text twice. My time is too valuable to spend it reading something that isn't even proof read.
Pick your Audience
In reviewing your site, it needs to have a better sense of purpose, and a clearer more focussed direction. In skimming the site the first time, I am not sure if your site is aimed at hobby MDing or security systems.
Focus on your Audience needs/wants
Most consumers are either one or the other, but not both. At FMDF, there is lots of mentioning of hobby use of metal detectors, but I do not see any posts about folks going out and setting up security systems.
If you are perhaps trying to set up a site to help advertise security systems and hoping that the connection of the current price of gold and all the hoopla surrounding hobby detecting is going to bring in more viewers, I think your efforts are going to bear very little fruit.
I hope that this is accepted as positive criticism. I hope that you will continue on with your site and achieve success. My suggestions are just one man's opinion.
GL & HH,
John Morton
BTW, You might want to check out what Mark Twain said about choosing the right word, instead of a nearly right word.